Saturday, December 05, 2009

Bartolo, No. 3

Removed for a poetry contest...

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For "Weird" on this week's Sunday Scribblings.

12 comments:

Rinkly Rimes said...

That is really tremendous! I don't understand it and yet I do! That's the mark of good writing. Lovely word pictures.

gs batty said...

interesting and wierd, also intrigueing and still wierd, a third reading. at least it makes me think

Dee Martin said...

Gotta watch those dadgum eyes :) This was a fun romp through the waves, smelling the sea and hearing the gulls and watching old Bartolo work his sunburnt muscles knotting up as he throws the nets. Loved this.

ojanna said...

that was a really fun to read, you hooked me in at the first line.

oldegg said...

Bartolo is a real hero that most of us surely can relate to. Weird, yes, but I love his weirdness.

Crafty Green Poet said...

I loved this, beautifully written and intriguing

Catherine Denton said...

Such a great poem, it had me laughing. I especially loved where he talked about potatoes and how he'd "prefer to keep them above ground".

WrightStuff said...

Great stuff - incredibly entertaining!

floreta said...

wow, very imaginative poem. i enjoyed it a lot!

Tumblewords: said...

This sings with wonderful weirdness and yet it tells the truth. I love the way it pulls me in deep, deeper and more deeply yet. I know Bartolo and yet he's a stranger. Wonderful!

MichaelO said...

Weird and wonderful! Like a Homerian tale full of Siren's and mermaids. Spouse-like fish faces mocking hunger. Loved this.

--jenna said...

Wow, everyone! I wasn't sure that Bartolo would be so well received...thanks!